Evening Hawk rewrite
If I was able to redo the timed write on the Evening Hawk poem I would first start with the theme. The theme is chose was about how the hawk acts like a bystanderin the world, seeing every fact from a different perspective, but I would like to change that to the hawk watching as the world changes around it. The poem illustrates more of a evolution theme rather than a descriptiveimage being created. The next thing I would like to change is my general understanding of the poem. First off, I had no clue why there was a bat and how that related with the poem, and also the last stanza seemed to be out of place. I later came to learn that if the central theme was the changes of the world that the last stanza made the changes seem insignificant. Like the pipe leaking in the cellar, the last stanza down plays the importance of the wind. There are a lot changes I would like to have made but the final one i want to illustrate are the lines about the earth’s geometry. I believe this select part had more importance than I gave it and would have liked to expand my narrative about it.